Sunday, September 11, 2011

29th Six Sentence Sunday, how badly does she want her stolen property back?

Kris Marlowe ventures further into the creepy old house in The Falstaff Vampire Files.

"The corridor on the left leads to the back door," Hal had told me on my first visit. "I keep my coffin in a shed out there--did I tell you I was a vampire?"

Strange how I forgot those words until I stood on the red stone floor again and started up the chilly staircase, also red stone.

A scrabbling sound nearby made me freeze in my tracks. I stopped to listen. The house seemed to shudder like a ship in the wind.

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13 comments:

  1. Paula MartinSeptember 11, 2011 at 2:35 AM

    Hmm, don't think I could forget if someone told me he was a vampire!

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  2. Gem SivadSeptember 11, 2011 at 4:32 AM

    The scrabbling noise would be at my back as I ran like hell for the door. Great six!

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  3. Kelly's MomSeptember 11, 2011 at 4:44 AM

    I love this! Its so creepy... in an intriguing way! Great six!
    Amy Durham

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  4. AnonymousSeptember 11, 2011 at 4:54 AM

    Gah! Way to leave me hanging! What made the noise?? Such a good six to choose.

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  5. Jessica E. SubjectSeptember 11, 2011 at 5:07 AM

    Very ominous!

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  6. Laura KayeSeptember 11, 2011 at 7:09 AM

    Creeptastic! Loved!

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  7. AnonymousSeptember 11, 2011 at 7:56 AM

    She forgot he's a vampire? and he told her where he sleeps??
    I like the red stone!

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  8. JoAnne KenrickSeptember 11, 2011 at 8:04 AM

    Oh heck, creepy.. The house seemed to shudder like a ship in the wind... love it!

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  9. Lynne MurraySeptember 11, 2011 at 2:06 PM

    Paula and Sassy, thanks! Kris found it easy to forget that he said he was a vampire because she doesn't believe in such things…so far…

    Gem, I'd be running right behind you, but Kris wants her property back very badly.

    Thanks Amy and Heather, I fell in love with this creepy old house, even though it scares me.

    Thanks Jessica and JoAnne, ominous and creepy were what I was aiming for.

    Laura, cool--I love the word "creeptastic"!

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  10. Sandra NachlingerSeptember 11, 2011 at 2:27 PM

    I love your simile: shudder like a ship in the wind. Very nice.

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  11. Lynne MurraySeptember 11, 2011 at 3:22 PM

    Thanks, Sandy Ruth!

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  12. 1000th.monkeySeptember 12, 2011 at 6:25 PM

    "...shudder like a ship in the wind." BEAUTIFUL!!

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  13. Lynne MurraySeptember 12, 2011 at 10:41 PM

    Thanks, 1000th monkey!

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