Sunday, March 13, 2011

4th Six Sentence Sunday snippet

From Bride of the Living Dead. After meeting and being instantly drawn to each other, Daria and Oscar share coffee and compare T-shirts, then he gives her a ride home.

He leaned over slightly to adjust the heater and put his hand on mine for a moment, then he reached up and lightly stroked my hair and kissed me lightly on the lips.
            "I’ll be good," he said, as if to himself.
            "I know," I said, as all my nerve endings heated up so fast that someone watching on infrared sensor would have been startled. "And even better," I pulled him back for another kiss and we moved back apart with a sigh.
            "I’d better get you home."
            I directed him to Anza Street, expecting him to ask me out on a second date, but never guessing he would break it.

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  1. Oh, so lovely until that last line. It stings. Great six.

  2. Great six! Now I want to know why he breaks it.

  3. Great six! And yay for the living dead! :-)

  4. Wait, he breaks it? I expected the date to end differently. I am anxious to read more.

  5. Thanks Sandra, Graylin, the road to love does have those twists and turns!

    Sarah, Lucy, Chrystalla and Jessica, your comments are so appreciated, I'm glad the hook worked!

  6. I'm wanting to know why he breaks it. They seemed so good together!

  7. Awww. I just love the twisty, sweet, delicious way reading this interaction makes me feel!

  8. Thanks, Lisa, Lauri and Jayel! Some mysteries cleared up next Sunday.

  9. I'll bet he'll be better than good!